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The Aegis Origin: Last Hope

Post by Tundra on Thu Jul 09, 2009 12:25 am

Prologue

Peace. Prosperity. Balance. Order.

We had all of it. We had everything a great place needed.
The key word being… had.

It was as if it was all gone in one second… by one breath of
air, by one step, by one screw-up… everything… was gone.

They say that once you’ve had it, you won’t get it twice.
They’re still trying to restore peace, prosperity, balance, and order… but they
truly know that all is lost and any that know that will just stop trying to
fight back and realize that our era is gone and that a new one is upon us. It
won’t be a better one. No. It’ll be a much, much worse one for any that were
apart of the old era and the people that fight back will have it even worse… if
they live.

I’m done here. I’m tired of having to watch people die. And
I know I won’t be able to keep them from doing all of these stupid things and
risking all of their best men out on the field… and getting my friends killed.
I don’t care if I won’t be able to stop them… but I don’t want to have to sit
around and watch this any more.

In this world of Aegis… that I really don’t know if I can
call it a world any more… it’s just a war. This beautiful place is going to be
destroyed… no, HAS already been destroyed in this war. Anything that this world
had before has already been lost or lost its charm because of one mistake. One
screw-up. And it was all gone…

It’s like it all happened in a millisecond… we had lost half
of Aegis before it had even seemed like the war started. After many casualties
and many battles, we had failed… and we were forced to fall back to the only
place we had left, Prontera… our last hope. And yet, we managed to screw that
up, too.

I don’t know how we still have Prontera. We’ve screwed up
too much. At any moment we’re going to lose Prontera and any of us that are
alive will be turned over and work as slaves for the rest of our lives. Most of
the others don’t think so. They think there’s still hope. They think that we
still have pride, that we still have SOMETHING. But I’m telling you right here.
We don’t. The Aegis that I knew. That
everyone knew. The true, honest-to-God Aegis… is gone. Nothing can redeem it
now, not even if there’s a miracle and we manage to win this stupid war.

If we win, what will we have conquered? It’s the same land
we used to have. We’ll have what we already had, just… the special thing that
it had when it started out. Is gone. We’ll have nothing. Not to mention all of
the damage that’s been done to it. We won’t be able to afford to repair it all,
if ANY of it. So what’s the point? It’s destiny that we’re going to lose this.
It’s time for a new order… and while this new order will do nothing but destroy
the world even more until it’s completely corrupted… I… I just… I don’t care. I’ve
been acting very strange lately. I guess, along with the world’s charm, my
charm went, as well. Well. That means there’s only one thing left to do.

This is my last entry. May whoever find this… have learned something.
If anyone finds this… you’ll have to find it pretty soon… because this world is
not going to last much longer. And if it does. The only thing that’s left… is
waste.

Goodbye.

Signed,

“Hm… wait a minute… maybe it’d be best if the one that found
this DIDN’T know who wrote it…” The person tore off the bottom of the page, “I’ll
bury this in a different place…” The person looked up into the night sky, and
then picked up his shovel and continued to dig a hole in the ground.
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Post by Tundra on Thu Jul 09, 2009 2:36 am

Chapter 1: Another Day

“Wake up! Wake up! Wake up!” The commander had screamed
through his megaphone as he walked across the room. “I WON’T LET YOU EAT MY—Ow!”
Tuna yelled as he hit his head on the top bunk. “Urgh…” Tuna rubbed his head
and slid out of his bed. The person in the bunk above him, Sazarai, had felt
the rumble as Tuna hit his head on his bed, and had woken up from it. “There
are better ways to wake me up, but… this works, I suppose,” Sazarai hopped out
of his bed and walked to the showers.

Tuna shook his head, “Agh… what time is it?” The commander
through him a stern look, “It’s… 3.” Tuna gave the commander a wide-eyed look, “What?!
We overslept?!” The commander raised his eyebrow. “AM… not PM.” Tuna looked
around for a clock, “What?! I only got like 3 hours of sleep! Why are we up so
early?!”

“THAT’S why,” The commander raised the blinds up and saw a
group of men standing atop a mountain, close to the Prontera Palace.
The men’s uniforms were all very similar, with subtle differences. At the center
was a snake-like ‘S’ that was made to look like it was on fire. There seemed to
be two from every class; two wielded guns, two wielded long swords, two wielded
short swords, and two wielded sword sticks. They stood atop the mountain making
very little movement. It seemed like they were statues, but if you looked close
enough you could tell that they were making small movements.

“They’ve been there for an hour or two. Just sat there and
did nothing. We haven’t made contact, and they don’t appear to be trying
anything funny. But I know they’re up to
something… What are you standing here for? Go, go! Get ready… once everybody’s
up we’re going to go meet them… they won’t dare attack unless they have an ace
in the hole…” The commander walked off. Tuna looked out the window at the 8
men, and then sat up and walked off to the showers.

Sazarai and Tuna walked outside, dressed in their usual
outfits, and set off toward the mountains. Tuna looked very uncomfortable.
Sazarai looked at Tuna, “Oi, what’s wrong?” Tuna looked up, “It’s still night
out. That’s what’s wrong.” Sazarai laughed, “Ah, just like the old days. We
used to be out at night all the time. Night time was THE time…” Tuna looked at
Sazarai, “Old days being the key words there… that was before the war, Saz…
before the war.”

“Hey! Tuna! Saz!” Dart and Tundra ran towards the two. Dart
looked out toward the hilltop that the 8 people stood on. “Pretty weird, eh? Oh
well. If these guys don’t get off, then we’ll give them a push.” Tundra
scratched his head, “Y’know… the weirdest part is how they got there to begin
with. They couldn’t have come straight through the gates. They had to’ve found
their way back there.” Sazarai laughed, “Hah! Do you know how hard the MVP room
is to get through, let alone route it to the back? Besides, they wouldn’t know
the way… only our people know all the routes of the MVP room… somebody would
had to’ve told them…” Tundra looked down, “My point exactly.”

Tuna, Sazarai, Dart, and Tundra had stopped behind the
commander. They looked ahead and saw that the 8 men were right in front of
them. Before any of the men could speak, the commander shouted, “WHAT ARE YOU
DOING HERE?!” The 8 men looked among one another, until one of them spoke, “We’re
here under orders of Lord S to… invite you… to a meeting…” “A meeting? The
commander looked at the men funny. “What does that bastard want? Tell him that
he can suck my—“ One of the eight men continued, “It is to be held on our
grounds."

“Your grounds?! Pfft! As if!” Silmeria had shouted out. “If
you guys are actually serious about this and it isn’t some kind of trap, then
you’ll hold them on OUR grounds!” The man shook his head, “Negative. Lord S
said that it is to be held on our grounds or no grounds.” Silmeria took a step
forward, “Then we’re not coming to this thing! Don’t trust this guy; it’s got
to be a trap!”

“Ok, ok, ok…” Sazarai waved his hand, “Look. We’ll hold this
out in one of Prontera’s fields to the far west. That’s about as close to ‘no
grounds’ as you can get. The Zadoras won’t be happy about it, but they’ll deal
with it. Everybody happy now?” The eight men whispered among all of themselves,
“Affirmative…”

The commander sighed, “I’m not happy about it. I don’t know why we’re doing this,
and I don’t know what it’s about, but I guess the fact that he’s calling it a
meeting rather than a deathmatch must mean something. Very well then. Time?”
One of the men spoke, “Sunset. We’ll get back to Lord S with these details. Don’t
be late.” The 8 men walked off.

Silmeria and many others stomped off angrily, the commander
walked across the hill, and Sazarai, Tuna, and Dart just walked off looking
confused. Dart looked back, “Hey! Tundra! You coming?” Sazarai and Tuna stopped
momentarily. Dart ran back up the hill, “What are ya doing?” Tundra looked at
Dart, “I was trying to see how they got here by watching them go back, but…
this fog is too thick. Blech. This is weird. Maybe I’m dreaming. Hey! If I’m
dreaming, then I can do this!” Tundra ran off in the distance.

“Whelp… I dunno about you guys, but I’m gonna go back to bed…
that was a waste of time…” Tuna slumped as he walked back towards the house. “Eh.
I’m not too tired. I’ll just get ready for the meeting.” Sazarai cheerfully
looked up at the rising sun. Dart tilted his head toward Sazarai, “Get ready
for the meeting? How can you get ready to stand around and listen to people
talk? I think I’m heading back to bed, too.” Tuna, Sazarai, and Dart stopped as
they turned around and saw Tundra being chased by the commander across the
hill. “You can’t kill me because I’m in a dreeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaam~”


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Re: The Aegis Origin: Last Hope

Post by Tuna on Thu Jul 09, 2009 4:11 am

Awesome~! Very Happy I can't wait til the series is complete ;D

SHOW ME CHAPTER 2 NAO!

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Re: The Aegis Origin: Last Hope

Post by Tundra on Thu Jul 09, 2009 10:37 am

Series? As in... the whole book series? That would take quite a while. If this one book in the series goes well, then I'm hoping for the "Aegis Origin" series to be very long. Plus, this is just one saga in it. Unless you mean just this book. Or this saga. Which... both may take a while, but. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Anywho, here's chapter 2 for your viewing pleasure:

Chapter 2: Wake Up Call

Tuna had awoken after finally getting the sleep he had
desired. He looked up at the clock, Hm…
12… overslept a bit, but...
Tuna then heard a loud scream from outside. He
quickly got dressed and rushed outside. “What’s going on out here?!” Tuna’s
attention was turned to Sazarai, who had clashed swords with a Zadora. Sazarai
turned to Tuna, “Oh, hey. You’re finally up… yeah, so apparently the first
thing they did after they told everybody it was going to be out in the fields
was tell the Zadoras... as you can see, they aren’t too happy about it…”

“So killing is the way to solve everything?!” Sazarai turned
his attention back to the Zadora, “Hey! He started it!” Sazarai slid his short
sword out from the clash between his sword and the Zadoras, made one swing forward,
and sliced the Zadora’s head clean off. “Decapitation; if all is lost, it
works!” Sazarai put his sword away. Tuna stared at Sazarai, “I’m pretty sure
the OTHER Zadoras aren’t going to be happy about that.” Sazarai shook his head,
“Hah! The Zadoras don’t give a damn about anybody or anything but themselves
and the land they walk on. If they have a problem with us coming, the first one
to step forward will end up like this one and I doubt any of the others will
care any more.” Tuna turned his head, “You make it sound so easy…”

“Well, these things started coming a few hours after you
went back to sleep. Not too many have come so far, but the commander put me in
charge of dealing with them...” Tuna looked down and felt his stomach rumbling.
“Agh… I needs to go eat meh a sammich.” Sazarai looked at Prontera’s front
gate, “Eh… I think that’ll be the last one for a while. Eh, ya know what? I’m
getting, hungry, too. Let’s go have some lunch…” Tuna and Sazarai walked off.

Tuna and Sazarai walked into the doors of the hottest restaurant
in town; Poring King. The place was bustling with activity and many had decided
to eat there today. They got in a rather lengthy line behind a female. Tuna
looked at the girl, “Hey! I remember you! You were at the hill with us earlier
today!” The woman turned around, “Ah! Yes! You’re Tuna! And you’re Sazarai! I’ve
heard about you two! :3” Sazarai turned
his head towards the woman, “You got a name?” She looked at Sazarai, “Ah! Doesn’t
everybody? He he~ My name is Nikuni.” Sazarai looked ahead, “Uh… yeah… that’s
great... can you move along now? The line’s moving…” Nikuni turned around, “Oof!
Sorry!”

Tuna and Sazarai had finally gotten to the front and Nikuni
had received her order. “I’ll see you guys around, then!” Nikuni walked off. Tuna
and Sazarai moved to the front. “Welcome to Poring King. What would you like?”
Tuna heard his stomach rumble again, “Dude, I’ve been looking at this menu for
a while now. I KNOW what I want… I want a—“

“Hey guys!” Tundra had walked through the doors and walked
up to Tuna and Sazarai. “Crazy stuff yesterday, eh? Err… this morning,” Tuna
turned to Tundra, “Yeah, it was pretty crazy…” Sazarai did the same, “Indeed…”
Tundra looked up, “Yup… crazy stuff… crazy stuff…” Tuna turned his attention
back to the man at the register, “Alrighty then, I’ll have a—“ Tundra spoke up
again, “Ah! You know what was REALLY crazy? I mean, it was ESPECIALLY crazy
when—“

*FLASHBACK SEQUENCE*

Tundra was standing in front of a group of very attractive
women. One of the women spoke, “Ooooh… Tundra… Tundra…” Another woman talked, “Isn’t he dreamy?” One of the women had fainted. “Don’t worry, ladies…” Tundra had put
sunglasses on, “There’s plenty of… Tundra… to go around…” All of the ladies
shouted, “Oooooh!”

“Wait, wait, wait!” Tuna waved his hands around. Tundra
turned to Tuna, “Aw… you interrupted me… I was just getting to the best part…” Tuna looked up, “That never happened!” Tundra
put his sunglasses on, “Oh… but it happened in my dreams… and ALL of this
morning was a dream… that part where the commander chased me across half of
Prontera kinda ruined it, though…” Tuna turned back to the man at the register,
“Riiiight… alright, I’ll have a—“

“HOLD EVERYTHING! Change of plans, people. The meeting has
been moved back two hours! We’ve all got to get going NOW!” Tuna grabbed his
hair angrily, “OH MY G— Aw, C’MON! Can I at least EAT first? Seriously! I didn’t
even get to EAT! Just give me 5 minutes and I’ll—“ Tuna turned back to the
register to see that a ‘CLOSED’ sign was in front of it. “GOOOOOOD DAMMIT!”

Tuna, Sazarai, the commander, and everyone else were walking
out in the fields. The commander held a large rifle in his hands. “Alright,
everyone. We’re halfway there and we still have abooooout… oh, I dunno. We’ll
get there in time. Don’t you worry.” Tuna was slumping forward as he walked, “Ugh…
there better be food at this thing…” Sazarai laughed, “Heh, if you can stomach
some raw Zadora.” Tuna looked up, “Hm… your proposition is interesting…”

The commander hummed to himself quietly, “Hm hm hm hm hm… oh
sh—“ A wolf had lunged forward and tried to attack the commander. “Argh… I
think that head of yours could use a little Dampf Flinte to clear out the shit
your head’s already clogged with!” The commander shot once and had blown the
wolf in half. “Freaking mutated, green-legged, good-for-nothing…” The commander
stepped forward and wiped the blood off of his shoes. Tuna stopped to look at
the wolf’s carcass, “Now THAT’S what you call… half a wolf… yeah.”

“Argh… we’ve gotta be close. We’ve gotta! I know it’s around
here… somewhere!” The commander looked down at his watch. “Urgh… not much time
left…” The commander had started to run forward, when he heard a voice. “That’s
quite enough, commander.” The commander, without thinking, had lifted his gun
and began to shout. “Who’s there? SHOW YOURSELF!” A large group of men had
emerged from an orchard of trees to the east. A man in radiant, multi-colored
robes and wearing both a shirt and a hat with a bright ‘S’ that stood out among
the others stepped forward. “I’ve been waiting for you…” The commander lowered
his gun, “You have a lot of nerve showing yourself to be me again after all you’ve
done…

…Sin.”


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Re: The Aegis Origin: Last Hope

Post by NiKuni on Thu Jul 09, 2009 10:48 am

:3!
The funny thing is that that always happens to me at those quick food places >.<

And poor fishie didn't even had time to eat ;-;

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Post by Tuna on Thu Jul 09, 2009 11:50 am

-stomach growls- I wanted that tuna sandwich so badly... T^T -sighs-

@Niku lmao xD coincidental hehehe >.<

And Sin, lmao woot~ Evil villain Very Happy "BWAHAHAHAHAHA~" ;D

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Post by Dragoon on Sat Jul 11, 2009 4:13 am

Lol, sure looked busy after everyone left

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Re: The Aegis Origin: Last Hope

Post by Tundra on Sat Jul 11, 2009 8:32 am

I'm quite proud of this one. It took a little bit more time than the other chapters and took a little revising, but I'm really proud of the way it turned out. Special thanks goes out to Nikuni and Dart for helping me out with some parts of this. Get ready for a quite hefty read.

Chapter 3: The Meeting of Madness

Sin merely smiled, “And you have a lot of nerve saying
that…” The commander made an extremely angry expression, lifted his gun, and
blasted the legs off of one of Sin’s men. Sin turned to look at the man the
commander had just shot, “Hm. And yet you are STILL the one to cause the
violence first. Tsk, tsk, tsk commander…” The commander reloaded his gun, “What
was that? You want another one of your men to lose their legs?!” Sin turned
back to the commander, “Why, I wouldn’t recommend doing that. As a matter of
fact, if you DO happen to do it again, then I guarantee that you will regret
it.”

Right then, the commander tried to leap forward and attack
Sin on the spot. A couple of his men held him back, thankfully. “Hmph. You’re
lucky they held you back. Now then, are you ready to sign under my terms?” The
commander almost leapt forward again, “Sign under YOUR terms?! What terms?! I’m
not signing anything!” Sin snickered a bit, “Hm. I guess ‘my terms’ isn’t a
good way to describe it. It’s more of a treaty than anything, I suppose.”

The commander lowered his gun, “A treaty, you say? I’m not
buying this!” Sin turned around and looked as if he was trying to find
something. “You shouldn’t, quite yet… considering it’s not exactly something
you’d agree to on the spot. Ah, here we are!” Sin turned back around and was
holding a folded-up wad of paper. “Now, you will surrender to us an—“ The
commander immediately cut him off, “Surrender to you?! We aren’t surrendering
to anybody!”

Tuna and Sazarai listened to the commander and Sin argue
back and forth. “Gah…” Sazarai shook his head, “I knew something like this
would happen. This isn’t going to end well…” Tuna turned around and saw Nikuni
running towards them, “Hey! I heard something was going on over here… why are
you two here?” Tuna turned back to the commander and Sin arguing, “Well, as you
can see… a meeting.” Nikuni looked at Tuna funny, “Huh? I thought the meeting
wasn’t for like… another two hours?” Tuna turned back to her, “Yeah, but almost
just after you left, the commander came in and announced that the meeting was
pushed back,” Tuna heard his stomach rumble again, “And I didn’t even get to
eat…”

Meanwhile…

“Ah…” Dart lets out a loud yawn as he finally wakes up. He
looks down at the bottom bunk to notice that Tundra is not there. Hm… must’ve already got up… Dart hops out of bed and takes a shower and gets dressed. Dart walks outside and looks around. Where is everybody? Generally there’s a lot of activity going on this time of day… Most of the stores and restaurants are closed. What’s going on
here?! Is this a joke…?
Dart screams out loud, “ALRIGHT! I KNOW THIS IS ALL
JUST A BIG PRANK! HA HA HA! YOU GUYS CAN COME OUT NOW!”

The Cattleya hears Dart screaming and walks outside to see
what all of the commotion is about. “Dart? What are you doing here? Shouldn’t
you be at the meeting?” Dart runs over to the Cattleya, “Meeting? What? Have I
been sleeping that long?” The Cattleya smiled at Dart’s comment, “No, they just
pushed the meeting back. You’d best get going now…” Dart considered this for a
moment, but decided against it. “Nah… I think I’ll leave the meeting to them. I
don’t think they’ll need my help… Besides, I have work to do. Thanks for the
update, though! I’ll see ya around!” Dart waved goodbye to the Cattleya and ran
off. The Cattleya went back inside.

Dart walked over to the blacksmith’s, noticing that the
blacksmith was on break. Or maybe he went
to the meeting… hm… Well, he won’t mind…
Dart began using the blacksmith’s
tools to attempt at creating some prototype guns. Some succeeded, some failed,
and some… were able to launch bananas. At least his hunger problem was solved. "Uh-oh..." Dart stated as one of his prototype guns had gone out of control and he had shot a metal ball into the sky. He continued working on various prototype guns, seeing just exactly what he was capable of making…

Back at the meeting, Sin and the commander were still
arguing. “Look, accept defeat now and we won’t have to kill all of you, and the
slavery to the ones that live won’t be as harsh.” The commander stomped
angrily, “Did you really expect me to come all the way out here with my best
men just so I could accept defeat?!” Sin looked at the piece of folded paper in
his hands, “No,” Sin looked back up at the commander, “As a matter of fact… I
was hoping you wouldn’t accept it… So that I could unveil my latest proje—“ All of a sudden, a metal ball had fallen from the sky and crushed one of Sin's men. "Well... that was anti-climactic..." The commander cocked his rifle, “Y’know what, I’m tired of listening to you talk!”
The commander tried to quickly aim at Sin and shoot, but he missed the target
and ended up blowing the head off of one of Sin’s men.

Sin tilted his head back down at the piece of folded up
paper, and slowly tilted his head back up until he was glaring directly at the
commander. “I warned you…” Sin looked back down at the piece of paper, “NOT TO
DO THAT!” Sin unfolded the piece of paper and a cane-like object fell from it.
Sin quickly grabbed the cane with his other hand and lifted it into the air.
“COME FORTH!” There was a moment of silence, as everyone started looking around
to see exactly what Sin had just done. Sin slowly brought the cane back down
and dropped it. “Now. It is time for you to witness my latest project. I said
you would regret it… and I am a man of my word.”

The commander started to laugh, “HA! A man of your word?
Your name is SIN! Do you know what Sin is? That was possibly the biggest lie
you’ve ever tol—“ Before the commander could finish his sentence, an army of
Zadoras suddenly appeared from every direction and started to attack the
commander and his army. Everyone was baffled by this, and tried to fight off
the Zadoras. The Zadoras were stronger than ever. Before anybody had an opportunity
to think, they were all trapped within the clutch of these powerful Zadoras.
The Zadoras were both blue and red. This did not make sense.

The commander struggled, trying to get out of the grasp of
the Zadora. “It’s no use, commander,” Sin laughed, “You’re trapped. You can’t
get out of this one.” The commander looked back up at Sin, “What have you
done?! Why are the Zadoras on your side?! Why are they so powerful?! Why are
the blue and red working together?! WHY ARE THEY WORKING WITH YOU?! ANSWER ME NOW, BASTARD!”

“Hmph. That is not important. However, what is important… is
that the Prontera fields are MINE now. We now have everything. Prontera is mine
now.” The commander was still struggling, “Ugh… we still have the city! YOU’LL
NEVER TAKE THE CITY!” Sin merely laughed at this, “Hmph. I have everything that
surrounds that puny city. You’re surrounded. Trapped in a box. All you have is
the center. And, as everyone knows… the center is the easiest, and most
satisfying part to eat…” Sin continued to laugh. Sin then picked up the
commander’s rifle. “Hm… nice toy that you have here…” Sin then bent the rifle
until he tore it in half. “Oh… what a shame. Looks like I broke your toy. Are
you gonna cry now?” Sin threw the remains of the commander’s rifle on the ground.
“Where was I? Oh, yes…”

“Not to mention… you’re going to die now. Are you feeling
that regret? Do you understand why I told you that you would regret doing it
again? Actually, you would’ve faced this either way. You just did the honor of
digging your own grave by going the extra mile and killing two of my men.
Either way, though… if you refused to sign to my terms, which I knew you would…
you would’ve had to face this. Stubborn as ever… born stubborn, and dead
stubborn. Just never could accept defeat… what will poor Prontera do without
its commander, hm? What will it do without its best men? WHAT WILL IT DO
WITHOUT THEM, COMMANDER?! TELL ME, COMMANDER! ANSWER ME!” Sin grabbed the
commander’s neck and began to choke him.

Sin let go of the commander’s neck. “Hmph… don’t worry,
commander… hold your head high. I’ll be sure to make your death the longest and
most painful… oh, the second longest. Prontera itself will be facing the
longest and most painful… Ah, ole’ kingy is going to be coming home to a surprise,
eh? When he sees the big words “Castle Sin” hovering over what used to be his
palace. Quite an inconvenient thing to come home to when you just got back from
a vacation with your family, hm? He’ll be quite disappointed that you fell for
such a simple trick and refused to accept defeat. And for that, the king will
just have to watch his family suffer and be killed at my hands. I’m sure he’ll
love that nice surprise. I hope he’s enjoying his last days with his family and
his life. I’ll be sure to remind him that all of this is happening just because
the person he left in charge is AS STUBBORN AS CAN BE!”

Sin walked away from the commander and back to where he was
standing, and picked the cane-like object back up. “Well then, play time is
over. Zadoras!” Sin pointed the cane at the Zadoras, “Kill them… starting
wiiiith… oh, let’s see here… that girl!” Sin pointed to Nikuni. Nikuni was
stunned and seemed to be paralyzed. The Zadora that was clutching her raised
his sword up, and was ready to come right down and slash her in half… Sin
walked over to Nikuni, “Yes, yes… build up the tension,” Sin came to eye level
with her and places his hand on her face. “Aw… such a shame that such a pretty
face must go to waste… all because of your commander. Must be pretty mad at
him, huh?” Sin took his hand off of her face and looked up at the Zadora. The
Zadora had turned around and had let go of Nikuni.

“Hey! I think I see that girl meow!” A group of red cats had
suddenly appeared over the horizon. “Uh-oh… Zadoras here meow… what are they
doing with the girl?!” One of the cats called out, “Hey! Give us that girl! She
has something we want!” The cat was speaking of Nikuni. All of a sudden, the
Zadoras let go of all of the people that were in their grasp and sprinted at the
cats on the hill. The cats sprinted at the Zadoras. Before anybody knew what
was going on, a huge battle between the red cats and the Zadoras had begun.

“What are you doing?! Get back here, you fools!” Sin was
pointing the cane at them constantly, but then turned around and saw the
commander, standing up again. The commander punched Sin right in the face, and
ran off. “EVERYONE! MOVE, MOVE, MOVE!” Most were still stunned and were unaware
of what was going on, but when they heard the commander all of them got up and
ran for their lives. Sin slowly got back up and turned to his army, “WHY THE
HELL ARE YOU STANDING THERE?! GO AFTER THEM! KILL THEM! KILL THEM ALL!” All of
Sin’s men immediately rushed after them.

Everyone was running for their lives. Nobody had a clue what
was going on. They were just running. Everything was pure madness. They saw
swords clashing, people shooting, cats flying everywhere, blood stains all
over, the corpses of cats and Zadoras. Nikuni looked at a few of the dead cats
and had begun to feel very guilty… but she was glad that she was still alive.
She still wasn’t exactly sure what was going on.

Sin’s men behind them were catching up to them. The ones
with guns were firing away. The ones with swords and knives were throwing them.
The ones with sword sticks were casting spells. Everything was going smooth for
a while, but they weren’t to Prontera yet… and the battle between the cats and
Zadoras was still happening. The commander turned around and saw that Sin’s men
were still catching up and had succeeded in killing a few men. “Damn! We can’t
lose them! Our men are falling!”

All of a sudden, Tuna had stopped in his tracks and was
grabbing his sword. Sazarai stopped for a split second, but continued running.
“Tuna! What are you doing?!” Tuna mumbled a few words to himself. Sin’s men
were getting closer and closer to Tuna. Sazarai continued running, but was
looking back. Tuna then swung his sword out in front of him. When it seemed
like Sin’s men couldn’t get any closer, out of nowhere, an ice wall that seemed
to stretch out for miles appeared in front of Tuna… with Sin’s men behind it.

Sazarai was stunned. “What?! I thought you were a
swordsman!” Tuna started running again, “Well… I am, but… I guess you can call
me a mix. That wall won’t hold for too long, though… so we best lose them while
we can.” Tuna and Sazarai ran and caught up to the group. The commander had
seen the whole thing. “Brilliant! Great job, Tuna!” Tuna constantly looked back
to see if the wall was still holding. “Yeah… it was nothing, really. Keep
running!”

Everything was going great. But then… a powerful bullet had
shot straight through the part of the ice wall. It was an almost perfect shot.
It shot the commander in the arm, and he had fallen down almost instantly. Sin
had been sniping from very far away. “Damn! He didn’t lose a limb. Perfect day
to only have one shot left,” Sin then began to scream out to his troops,
“EVERYONE! RETREAT! TODAY HAS BEEN MARKED AS A FAILLURE. WAIT… NO! TODAY WASN’T A FAILURE. THEY JUST GOT LUCKY. NEXT TIME… AND THOSE CATS ARE NEXT!” Sin threw his sniper away, and walked off, as his men slowly retreated and followed him.

“Commander! COMMANDER!” Everyone was shouting and freaking
out that their commander had fallen, had a fatal wound, and was possibly dead.
“He’s not dead… he still has a pulse…” Sazarai was closely examining him. “But
if we don’t get him back to Prontera and to an emergency room soon...” Tuna
looked down at the commander, “What are we waiting for, then?! Let’s get out of
here!” Tuna and Sazarai heaved the commander on their backs and ran as fast as
they could toward Prontera.
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Post by Tuna on Sat Jul 11, 2009 7:56 pm

-SCREAMS- Omg!! TuT -cries tears of joy- That magic scene made my day!! <3

And wow.... Sin is such a badass >.<;; I wonder where he's been lol, he hasn't even read this yet D:..

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Post by Tenderness on Sat Jul 11, 2009 11:15 pm

Wow Nice story ._., Even i thought Tuna was a swordie lol. And Sin is the eviliest villan huh? ._.

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Post by NiKuni on Sun Jul 12, 2009 12:39 am

Sorry tundra xD I just couldn't resist myself x3
Alright... here goes.


Aegis Origins
Chronicles 1x - Part One



She ordered some Poring Fried Potatoes and a Marin Cola. She liked the Tea made of Pukui Leaves they
had in that local but it seems her pocket was a bit short in money, or rather she was saving it for
something else.
As she was leaving the restaurant, she saw someone rushing inside, like if he had seen some sort of
awesome event and wanted to tell everyone... or if he was just starving to death. "Some people really
are desesperate to eat at that place ._." she thought to herself.

Ignoring the man, she just continued her way towards Regenbogen's Auction House. A place where
adventurers could sell their products to their fellow adventurers, and where they were the bosses of
commerce. She looks like she's looking for a particular item between all the armor and magical stones
they had for sale, "Can I help you miss?" the clerk said to her, "Hmm... I'm looking for an item that
was put into auctioning yesterday, I don't quite remember the name but If I see it then I'll remember
:3". The clerk headed towards the storage to see the auction records, "Well missy, it seems that there
were only 3 items put in auction yesterday, I'll bring them to you so you can choose what you would
like", "Ok! :3" she answered.

As she was waiting for the clerk to come back, she saw someone heading to the auction house as well.
It looked like a tiny person who was carrying a small rod, and covered his head with a cloak, like if
he was trying to hide something on the top of his head...
"Sorry for the delay miss, these are the only items that were put on sale yesterday" The man showed
her a fine suit of shining golden armor, which looked quite heavy. "Hmm...nope" she said. Then, he
showed her a small stone that seemed to have the image of a peculiar Rifle inside. "Nope, this isn't
it either" she said. "That means you would like this one then...?" the man showed her a ball of red colored
thread that almost looked like a cat's toy. "Yes! that's the one! :3" she said happily, "Alright, one
Red Thread Ball, that'll be 8000 rufi please..." the man said, with a face that showed both confusion
and dissapointment.

"Ok I've gotten it!, now all I have to do is to bring these to her x3!, now which way was it again...? this
city is so big and confusing x.x" she said this as she was heading towards NorthWest Prontera fields.

"Uhmm excuse meow.. I mean me!, I'd want a Red Thread Ball please" the little man said to the clerk
at Regenbogen. "Oh I'm sorry mister, I've just sold one to the missy that just left", "MEOW!!??...
I mean... WHAT!!??, which way did she go!!??" the little man said this as he pointed towards the clerk
a Sword Stick that came from the rod he had in his hands, while the cloak that covered his face fell
off, revealing a pair of... cat ears... "Ahh!! She was heading towards NorthWest Prontera!! Please
don't hurt me!!" the clerk said this as he pushed a button behind the desk, which made a loud sound.
"Help!! its the Red Cat Gang!! Guards!! Anyone!!", "Meow!... I mean... dang it!, That female human will
pay for this Meow!!" the bandit said as he rushed towards the NorthWest entrance at incredible
speed.

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Post by Shinful on Sun Jul 12, 2009 4:30 am

Lmao! This is verrrrrrryyy nice~ Just dun kill me in a lame way! lol~ so far so good ;]~

U know, I should'ce controlled cats instead of the Zadoras, since my real name is Felix ;]~ (U know~~ Felix dominicus is the latin name for cats! bwahwhawha.) But anyway..., this is really a good one! ^__^

Can't wait to see someone die BHWHWHHWAA!!
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Post by NiKuni on Sun Jul 12, 2009 5:30 am

Well... basically the cats aren't controlled by anyone, they just want me because I have something they want, and they can't steal it from me if I'm dead (well they can... but where's the fun!? >:o)

And for your viewing pleasure...


Aegis Origins
Chronicles 1x - Part two


"*sigh*... I wonder why nobody comes around here anymore..., my sis in alfheim forest always gets a
good laugh with people getting killed by francoous, but these guys here hardly need me... maybe its
because we're so close to the capital?" the woman tought to herself. She had long hair tied down with
a cute ribbon, dark skin that tells of all the time she spends on the same place to fulfill her job, and
a bluish uniform that revealed her profession from miles away.

The woman made another sigh after she was distracted from her boredom by someone that was heading
towards her. The person said "Tharaaaaa!! :D" as she was getting closer. She looked like a young woman
with red hair tied as twin tails on the sides, she also had some weird fin ears around her head, and
wore a suit of light armor while carrying a long sword at her hips.

"Oh Nikuni!, you're back!" Thara said to her, "Yep! and look what I found! :3" she said this as she
showed Thara a ball of crimson colored thread. "Way to go girl!, I suppose you want to wait for Rhiki
don't you?" she said to Nikuni, "Huh? she isn't here? o.o?", "Nope, she said she felt something was
going on, and wanted to investigate what it was. She also told me to get away from my post if things
got dangerous and take refuge at the city. I can't believe that girl! is she trying to scare me or
what!?", "Oh well, I think I'll just wait here then, mind if I make you company? :3" Nikuni said this
as she quickly jumped on the bed that was near, "Hah!, don't underestimate me. All cattleya workers
are highly trained personal in the ways of serving people, even if that means I get bored to death at
the station! I'm able to fulfill my duty without the need of amusement!" Thara said this with a weird
expression on her face. "so... you were bored right?" Nikuni said to her. "Wh.. what makes you think
that!? I told you I'm a highly trai..." Nikuni quickly interrupted her "Because you just said so!, even
if that means I get bored to death at the station, you said it just now! xD". The cattleya blushed a bit,
while trying to hide it, "... a.. anyway!, its nice to have a bit of company from time to time, even for
a highly trained person like me...", Nikuni was just laughing at her while Thara blushed even more. They
kept a nice conversation for quite a while..."Hm..?" The cattleya looked like she noticed something,
"Thara, what's wrong?" Nikuni said to her, "Look at that" Thara said this as she pointed up the hill where
a group of reddish figures started to appear and get closer to where they were. "I'm going to take a
look, brb :3" Nikuni took her sword and headed towards the hill.

Up there, one of the figures headed forward from the others. "MEOW!!... I mean... YOU!!" one of them
said to her.
"Me? o.o?" Nikuni was a bit confused because it seemed that the figure knows her from somewhere, but
she can't recognize whatever was talking to her.
"Yes you!, hand over the Red Thread Ball meow!!... I mean now...!!", Nikuni completely ignored what it
was saying to her, she was still trying to recognize what was talking to her... until she noticed the
little ears in the head of the small bandit.
"OMG A KITTY!!! <3" she rushed to hug the cat bandit. "Hey! I'm not a cat! get away from meow!!... I mean
me...!!"
"there kitty... who's a cute little angry kitty? that's right you are x3", She once again ignored him
as she was petting the bandit on the head, which by the way seemed to enjoy it quite a lot, "meowwww.....
I mean!!...hey!!" the bandit made a quick slash in the air with his Sword Stick to keep her away, "Stop
doing that and give us the Red Thread Ball you meowght!... I mean you bought!", Nikuni took the Red Ball
that was on her pocket, "This? why the cute little kitty wants this? o.o?", the cat bandit blushed a bit
just like the cattleya did before, "...", "well...? o.o?" Nikuni asked again, "th... that's none of your
business meow!!!, go and take the ball from her!! ATTACK MEOW!!... I mean now!!"
As the bandit gave the orders to his companions, Nikuni took off a small knife from a pocket in her shoes,
it looked like a small fruit knife of some sort. "Go! go and make her pay meow!!" the bandit said as a
sudden flash of light appeared and was gone as fast as it showed up, their companions suddenly stopped,
"what's going on!!?? kill her meow!!... I mean... oh you know what I mean...", then the bandit realized
that all the weapons were cut in half, and that some of them had their whiskers cut. "!!... what was that
meow!!", all of them looked shocked as they realized something... Nikuni had some of the cat whiskers on
her hand, and some wood pieces around her feet. "Great!! I got the cat whiskers I needed!!, now I just have
to wait for Rhiki to come back!! x3, see ya later kitty! :3", the bandits retreated from where they came,
while some of them were walking oddly, like if they were drunk. "Y... you'll pay for this meow!!" the leader
said, as he lost balance and fell.

As Nikuni was heading back to the cattleya station, she noticed Thara was talking with someone else. She
was a woman with blue hair and a long cloak, that hid all her clothes, only revealing her face. "Rhikiiiii!!!
:3" Nikuni said as she was approaching them, "Oh there you are, sorry I took so long. It seems you had
some fun yourself too. So, you got them already?" Nikuni showed her the cat whiskers she just got, the red
ball she had on her pocket, and a strange "S" shaped insignia made of metal. Rhiki looked a bit surprised,
"I asked you to bring me a small piece of metal, but where did you find this?" she said to Nikuni, "I had
to steal it from some scary guy, it wasn't easy I tell you, I'm not used to steal stuff like thieves do
but... x3", Rhiki took all the items, "It's ok, I was just curious. Now wait a second", Rhiki turned around
while a misterious red glow came from her hands. "There you are, its the suit I promised you.", Rhiki gave
her a red suit with a crescent moon like insignia on the chest, "yayyyy!!! x3 you're the best Rhiki!! <3 Thank
you!! :3", "It's nothing, it has been quite a long while after I did this... now... about what I told you
before...", Nikuni quickly answered, "Oh yes! don't worry I won't tell anyone ;3", "Tell what?" Thara asked,
"Oh sorry, I promised Rhiki not to tell anyone, its a secret! x3" the cattleya looked dissapointed, "uhh ok
ok, don't worry. Now, what are you two going to do?", Rhiki turned to the cattleya, "I'm going to go back to
the Western swamp, there's something that I still must investigate... what about you Niku?", "I don't know
xD, maybe I'll head towards Airemlis Lighthouse, that place always helps me to decide what to do since It has
a nice view of the continent", "Ok" Rhiki said, "but be sure not to head towards the west, I feel the Zadoras
are getting upset by something. Also, if you find any more scary guys with that S insignia, run away, they're
bad news, got it?", "alright alright, I won't -.-" Nikuni replied while crossing her fingers.
The three of them shared some last words before parting ways.

"*sigh*... back to the boring days..." the cattleya said this as she looked at the horizon.

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Re: The Aegis Origin: Last Hope

Post by Tundra on Mon Jul 13, 2009 2:40 am

Aw. D: You said you weren't going to post those until the end... Eh,
it's ok, I suppose... At least it gives me an excuse to not work o-- I mean... take more time on the next chapter... BUT SEND ME THE NEXT CHRONICLE ALREADY! XD Also,
what did you think of this chapter?

Thanks for the kind words, everyone! I'm glad you all seem to be enjoying the story. I was afraid of what the reaction would be at first... but thanks! Very Happy

And Sin, about the cat thing...

Sin from the story wrote:...AND THOSE CATS ARE NEXT!

Thanks again, everyone! I'll get to work on the next chapter now... maybe.
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Post by Tuna on Mon Jul 13, 2009 4:58 am

OMG! He's gonna take control of the cats too.... NUUUUUUUUU make Tuna go all epic on them again xD!!!

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Post by TigerArmy on Mon Jul 13, 2009 2:23 pm

>.>
<.<
>.>

i r never in stories..

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Post by Zhaine on Mon Jul 13, 2009 4:54 pm

lol ure not the only one..even that i'm catman =o
...and it's so much cat inside What a Face
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Re: The Aegis Origin: Last Hope

Post by NiKuni on Mon Jul 13, 2009 8:58 pm

We'll try to add as much people as possible, be it either in the main story or in the chronicles.
So don't worry :3

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Post by Tundra on Mon Jul 13, 2009 10:52 pm

Can you guys give me feedback rather than complaining that you aren't in it...? Seriously...

I didn't even know of Zhaine's existence when I put the chapter up.

AND DID YOU EVER STOP TO THINK THAT I'M SAVING CHARACTERS FOR LATER? I'm not going to shove every single person I've ever met on Aegis all into every chapter. It would be too cluttered and messy,
and it would allow for minimal character development. I'm saving other character's introductions for later. I'm not making any promises, but you MIGHT be in it. Can you please just comment on the actual story for right now? Please?

People that are left out, or that I don't know, or that I couldn't fit into the story, or the Niku or I thinks deserves a part may be included in her CHRONICLES thing. That's the point of them. You may also be included in a chronicle before I start to include you in the story.

This is going to be HUGE, people. I already know I'm planning on having a sequel to this. Some characters need to be saved for a long time. JUST BECAUSE YOU WEREN'T IN THE FIRST FEW CHAPTERS DOESN'T MEAN YOU AREN'T GOING TO MAKE AN APPEARANCE IN THE ENTIRE SERIES.

I'm serious when it comes to writing, and complaints like these just set me off. Because, I'm wanting to be given FEEDBACK, CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM, or SUPPORT. If you actually HAVE a complaint that isn't actually existent within the realm of this story, back it up! Think it through! But for any that have complaints that they aren't characters without any source backing it up, plot ideas for your character, or reasons why you should be in now and not later, just please don't post it. You have an idea for the plot that's actually a good idea for a plot that may include your character but wasn't made just to give your a character a stupid excuse to be there? Yeah, sure, send it to me in a PM and I'll think it over.

But guys, seriously. Think before you post. Please...
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Post by Zhaine on Mon Jul 13, 2009 11:04 pm

Tundra wrote:But guys, seriously. Think before you post. Please...

yeah if you had thought before posting that whole wall of text wouldn't be neccessary.

all i tried was to answer Tiger's comment in a more funny way...maybe you shouldn't take that too serious.
i believe even Tiger wasn't that serious about being in the story and i just got that idea because of all that cats in the story... i personally don't need to be in - got no problem with that.
an we are the ones that "complain", right?
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Post by Tundra on Mon Jul 13, 2009 11:41 pm

In that case, then there was no need for either of you to post at all, no?

I was not the only one that thought the both of you were being serious. Niku thought so, too. She just wasn't mad about it like I was. You didn't answer to her "Oh, we were just kidding."

And neither of you commented on the actual story. That's what really set me off. Comment about the actual chapter. Give me feedback, all that jazz.

Trust me, I thought before posting. If either of you had talked about the story I wouldn't have ranted like that. When you don't talk about the story and post a "joking" comment like that it's just pointless and it doesn't help me at all. It makes me feel like you either didn't read it, didn't pay attention, or didn't care for it.

The "joking" thing isn't even really a proper excuse. The only sort of comedy that could be found within either of those comments would be sarcasm, which is rather hard to tell on the internet unless presented in a clear or obvious way.

There are likely going to be actual people that complain about not being in the story, so either of you and Tiger's statements were not presented in a clear or obvious way.

So yeah. I'm going to shut up now, because I'm starting to spam my own thread with this crap. The yelling (Meaning unnecessary caps lock) should not have been said by me. But next time, do keep your comments actually relevant to that of the story and give feedback or constructive criticism or support or... something...

Ok, y'know what? I'm sorry. Whatever. I was in a bad mood and maybe I'm just being a jerk when saying all of this. Though feedback would be appreciated.


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Post by Dragoon on Mon Jul 13, 2009 11:59 pm

(Story seems good so far, you've already heard my comment on skype though lol)
(Side Part, while still at the Blacksmith shop)

Dart: "Phew, prototypes one and two are ready to be shown. One is a Machine gun, and Two is a shotgun."
(One)

(Two)

"Hmm... I wonder if that metal ball that shot off hit someone... oh well, hope the commander will like these."

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Post by Tundra on Tue Jul 14, 2009 9:11 am

Welcome one and all, to the first edition of Shorigins! Now, what is Shorigins, you ask? Shorigins is basically a series of comical segments between characters in THE AEGIS ORIGIN that I thought about making, but couldn't include in the actual story. You ever read a comic? This is essentially a comic without any pictures, which defeated the purpose of a comic. Is there such thing as a novel comic? If there was, this would, in some form or way, be it's baby. A corny name can get you far! These things will be stuff that I didn't really think over, or that I just came up with on the spot really. They won't be long, just a few paragraphs. Unless I want it to be long or get carried away with it. Then it'll be long. I will take suggestions for these. Also, these aren't placed in a specific time. This may not have happened in the time the story is in now. For instance, you know the end of chapter 3? Where the commander was injured? Well, this first edition of Shorigins will involve the commander, and he is clearly in good condition and not injured. Meaning, it happened in the past. So yeah.

And is this essentially what
Niku is doing? Yes. Except she does it mainly concerning characters
that aren't involved with the main plot or she makes sub-plots that
explain why something in the plot happened or why a certain person is
there. This is stuff using characters that are in the story already and
don't really have too much of a plot to them. They're just these
quote/unquote funny... wait... Why did I say quote/unquote? Why didn't
I just do this: "funny"... Eh, anyways... they're just these "funny"
situations and random happenings that don't tie in with the story too
much, they're just... there... Gah, I can't properly explain it.


Basically, when I have writer's block, you'll be getting a LOT of these. So instead of listening to me talk about WHAT it is, how about you find out for yourself. (The story begins after this... no, wait, after this... I mean... after this... um. Gah... after the next freaking parentheses...)

Shorigins
First Edition
The Commander's History Lesson


Tuna had just came in the "headquarters" from training and saw the commander sitting around and reading a book. Hm... Y'know, I've always wanted to ask the commander a few questions... it's kinda slow today, not many people out training... and it's really, REALLY hot... commander shouldn't be doing much. I mean, he's READING. He MUST be really bored... hm, he won't mind... Tuna walked up next to the chair that the commander was currently sitting in. The commander didn't notice him at first. Tuna sit there for a few minutes, waiting.

The commander finally noticed him. "Ah! Tuna! Didn't see you there. My apologies," Tuna closed the book he was reading and placed it on the table beside him. Tuna looked over to see the title of the book that the commander was reading. "Um... Catch Phrases for Dummies?" The commander looked at Tuna, "Yeah... what do you think of 'MEACK!'?" Tuna gave the commander a strange look, and then picked up the book and closely looked at it. "Who the hell wrote this?" Tuna placed the book back down.

"Anywho... what's up, Tuna? Need something? Having trouble? Need my assistance in any way? Do you need me to do something? Anything at all? Hm?" Tuna turned back to the commander, "Wow. You must be the most bored out of all of us," The commander sighed, "Yeah... it IS a rather dull day... you came here for a reason, though, I suspect... Whatcha need?" Tuna thought for a moment, and then spoke. "Well... I've been meaning to ask you something..." The commander jumped out of his seat. "Shoot!" Tuna spoke, "Well... do you have a name?"

"Yes, of course!" Tuna looked confusingly around the room for a moment, "Well then... um... what is it?" The commander sat back down in his seat. "Commander!" Tuna raised an eyebrow at the commander, "Yeah, I... probably should've seen that coming. But I do have another question," The commander made motions with his hands, "Yes, yes, go on," Tuna scratched his head, "Well... how did you become the commander? Not to be offensive or anything... I was just wonde--"

"How I became commander?! Boy, are you in for a story! Sit down!" The commander hopped out of his seat and pushed Tuna into the seat that was directly behind him. "Ah, the day it all happened... well, there I was, just a regular marine..." Tuna spoke up, "Was your name the marine back then?" The commander made an angry face at Tuna, "How rude! Why, my parents would never name me after some dull, horrible movie starring a wrestler that's clearly passed his prime!" Tuna sank back into his seat, "Sorry..."

"You should be. Now then, where was I? Ah, yes... I was just a marine among thousands of others. I was no one special... but that day is truly what proved my worth! It was a normal day. A dull, boring day like this one. I was sitting around, doing nothing. But then we all heard the alarm. And when I say we, I mean me. The alarm happened to be broken in every room but the one I was in. Annnnd nobody else was in there... at all... So, naturally, I came to the aid of this alarm. By myself. With no one to help. At all."

"After tracking where the SOS has come fom, I discovered that it was a group of terrorists that were going to blow up a building filled with a bunch of important people. Like, you know... all of the people from Friends. And this one other girl. Who wasn't very imortant, I guess she was just with them when they got kidnapped by the terrorists. Anywho, a few dead terrorists later, the girl was saved, there was one less building, and all of those people from Friends were dead."

"Wait... so you just saved the girl?" The commander sat back down, "Yup. And nobody knew about it but her and I," Tuna sat back up, "Huh?! How did that happen?" The commander looked up at Tuna, "I hate that show!" Tuna gave the commander another strange look. "You didn't save them just because you don't like the show? That's a little--" The commander stood back up, "No! There were logical reasons as to why I didn't save them... I assume..."

"Anyway, after that, the girl and I started dating, then we got engaged, then we got married, popped out a few kids, then we divorced, and then she moved her and the kids to the Czech Republic!" Tuna looked confused, "Um... how does that explain how you became commander at all?" The commander shook his head, "Huh? We're talking about how I became commander?" Tuna looked around for a moment, "Um... yeah..." The commander laughed for a moment, "Phew, good... because I made all of that up. How I became commander, eh? That, too, is an interesting story..." As the commander was about to start the story, the alarm began to ring. "God dammit... must be another Marin infestation... Whelp, I've gotta go," The commander picked up his rifle and ran out the door. Tuna sighed, "I hate cliffhangers, don't you?"

[This ended up being longer than originally intended... hopefully the next Shorigins will be... more true to it's name...]
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Post by Tuna on Wed Jul 15, 2009 5:34 am

Boo Cliff hangers!!! I never did like them during anime, I sure as hell don't like it during the Shorigins either!! ;[

Lol, I'm so curious, who is the commander?? -ponders- I shall continue reading til I find out!!

Keep it coming buddy~ :] and keep up the great work!

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Post by Tundra on Sun Aug 16, 2009 7:16 am

Hey everyone,

Sorry I haven't updated in a while. I have pretty much no excuse, though I have plenty I could make up.

I deserve to be punched, especially since the last thing I updated you with was the single worst thing I've ever written in my entire life. And it was a month ago. In that case, I deserve to be punched twice. My apologies.

The story is going to continue, I've just had a very bad case of writer's block for a while now.

Just thought I'd let you guys know I'm not dead.

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